Can someone edit this mess for me?
February 262010
If I could not read my whole world would be a very dismal and dark place. And I feel sorry for those people who have no interest no desire to read. Reading takes me to a different place, world and time. Reading makes me forget about everything and focus on what the main character is going through and how is he or she going to get out of their troubling dilemma. In a lot of ways reading is very much therapeutic as it helps you forget about a stressful day. It is educational as a nonfiction account of a particular subject, like a war, will teach readers things they did not know before like how cold weather can affect tanks and ultimately the war. Out of the millions upon millions subjects to read about, I personally like to read about the Vampire Chronicles written by Anne Rice and any books by African-American Authors.
I enjoy these types of books mainly because I love the story line to them and how they can keep me wrapped up for hours at a time. I have read all of the Vampire Chronicles which follows a vampire named Lestat around the world, through time and all of the obstacles he faces as both a protagonist and antagonist. I enjoy reading about him because he is so personal and you really see things from his perspective even if it is wrong. The author is also very talented because there are times in which the book isn’t told through Lestat’s perspective but rather another vampire. For example, the first book in the Vampire Chronicles is told from Louis’ (another vampire) perspective and his writing style and views are much different than Lestat. Because Anne Rice is so talented in the way that she writes, all of the vampires have a unique voice and it’s as if the books are written by six to seven different vampires.
The same goes for E. Lynn Harris, who is an accomplished African- American writer. For a long time he wrote books about a character named John Basil Henderson who was a very famous sports agent who was bi sexual but lived a secret life as a gay man. Throughout the books you can see how Basil deals with his sexuality, the people in his life and the haunting of his sexual abuse by his uncle when he was younger. He is very much like a Lestat in the way he goes through life as being both a good and bad guy. Also, like in the Vampire Chronicles certain chapters in these books are told from other characters. The difference in their tone and voice is written and executed. Again, it is another well written book that is simply amazing and keeps me turning the pages.
I enjoy books that keep me in suspense. Books that are not just told from same person from page one to page five hundred fifteen. I like it to be diverse in the narration, the time, and maybe even the place. I like being able to put two and two together to figure what is going to happen next and being surprised. Most of all I just like books that are well written that makes me feel like I am right next to the main character, that I can feel what he or she is feeling, thinking and going through.
Don’t start sentences with "And."
Comma after "world."
The forth sentence isn’t clear. Replacing the first "and" with because I or something similar would make it better.
"He or she" is awkward, change the sentence so you can use they instead.
I personally don’t like "very much."
"It is educational" because. Not as. This sentence is also a run on, and you might want to break it up.
No dash between "African" and "Americans," and "Authors" should be lowercase. The meaning of this sentence isn’t clear. You’re saying you like to read books that mention The Vampire Chronicles and books by African Americans.
Storyline is one word, and no "to them."
Break up the second sentence so you don’t have to use "which." No comma.
Is not, not isn’t. No contractions in a formal essay.
Maybe use since, instead of "because."
No contractions again.
I’d get rid of "who is."
No dash in African American.
The second sentence is a run on. I’d break it up at "who was."
Comma after "people in his life."
Comma after "Vampire Chronicles"
You need a positive word after "executed."
"I like" them. Not "it"
Phrases like "two and two together" are too informal for a formal essay, but it depends what teacher you are writing for.
The last sentence is another run on. The "that" needs to be and.
February 26th, 2010 at 1:45 pm
WOW lol i like books were i feel like im in the story like im a character and suspense were u dont know whats gonna happen next
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February 26th, 2010 at 2:34 pm
Don’t start sentences with "And."
Comma after "world."
The forth sentence isn’t clear. Replacing the first "and" with because I or something similar would make it better.
"He or she" is awkward, change the sentence so you can use they instead.
I personally don’t like "very much."
"It is educational" because. Not as. This sentence is also a run on, and you might want to break it up.
No dash between "African" and "Americans," and "Authors" should be lowercase. The meaning of this sentence isn’t clear. You’re saying you like to read books that mention The Vampire Chronicles and books by African Americans.
Storyline is one word, and no "to them."
Break up the second sentence so you don’t have to use "which." No comma.
Is not, not isn’t. No contractions in a formal essay.
Maybe use since, instead of "because."
No contractions again.
I’d get rid of "who is."
No dash in African American.
The second sentence is a run on. I’d break it up at "who was."
Comma after "people in his life."
Comma after "Vampire Chronicles"
You need a positive word after "executed."
"I like" them. Not "it"
Phrases like "two and two together" are too informal for a formal essay, but it depends what teacher you are writing for.
The last sentence is another run on. The "that" needs to be and.
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